I wrote about my struggle with writer’s block on Romance Books ‘4’ Us blog.
https://romancebooks4us.blogspot.com/2023/02/writers-block-by-janice-seagraves.html
I wrote about my struggle with writer’s block on Romance Books ‘4’ Us blog.
https://romancebooks4us.blogspot.com/2023/02/writers-block-by-janice-seagraves.html
You’ve probably been told that saw, watched, heard, felt are telley, and you shouldn’t use them.
It’s because those words distances you from your reader.
As writers we need to be as unobtrusive as possible in our stories, so our readers can set aside their disbelief and enjoy the ride. 🙂
It’s way too easy to fuss over the details before you get the story written.
The thing is, you have to give yourself permission to write a sloppy first draft, and promise your internal editor it can have a crack at the ms after it is finished.
I haven’t done a lesson in a while, so let’s look at the word down.
Mini Lesson: Down
By Janice Seagraves
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The word down is a direction, if used correctly it can indicate where things are headed. But I tend to find it creeping into my sentences and I bet I’m not the only one.
Example: Roger sat down on the chair.
Here we see down used to indicate that Roger is sitting, but in this sentence down is a given so we don’t really need it.
Correct: Roger sat on the chair.
Example: Roger walked down the street.
Again the word down is a given. He wouldn’t be floating along the street, now would he?
Correct: Roger walked along the street.
Example: Roger set his coffee cup down on the table.
Again down is a given.
Correct: Roger set his coffee cup on the table.
Example: Roger looked down at the small child.
A small child will be lower than a grown man (we hope) unless the child is up a tree.
Correct: Roger looked at the small child.
You’ll find deleting down in your writing will lower your word count, which is always a good thing.
When is it okay to use down? You can use down to indicate a direction.
Example: The cat climbed down the tree.
Example: The leaf floated down.
Example: The bird fluttered down onto the lawn.
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