Trouble with head hopping?
Action before reaction
By Janice Seagraves
Have you ever written anything like this?
Example: Megan screamed as a big, ugly boar stuck its head in the tent opening.
Did you see what’s wrong here?
Megan reacts by screaming, before the boar’s head is in the tent.
Always remember action before reaction.
Correct: A big, ugly boar stuck its head through the tent opening. Megan screamed.
Always put the action first.
Whether you follow up with action, emotion or internal thought, the action (boar) that provoked the reaction (scream) has to come first.
Here’s the finished product from Windswept Shores:
Windswept Shores by Janice Seagraves
Cover Contest Winner
erotic contemporary romance
novel (approx 50K)
Cover Art by Pink Petal Books with assistance from Winterheart Design
The sole survivor of a plane crash, Megan is alone on a deserted island in the Bahamas until she finds a nearly-drowned man washed up on shore. Another survivor, this time from a boat wreck. With only meager survival skills between them, will they survive and can they find love?
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